The Riches of Xulthar: Chapter 1

Roderick

“I know why you seek the lost city of Xulthar,” the old crone said as she peered over the top of her crystal ball. “But the riches you find there shall bring you naught but evil and sorrow.”

Roderick the Young of House Valtan rolled his shoulders back as his sharp eyes scanned the fortune teller from head to toe. His broad hand unconsciously brushed the hilt of his sword, which had seen more use than most of its kind. Unlike most of the noble born these days, his boots were worn and caked with dust, his arms bronzed, his face lined and weathered from the wind of the open road—a testament to the hard times that had befallen his house. But Roderick was not one to let the whims of fate define him.

“What do you mean, old woman? Speak your prophecy.”

The robes of the haggard old sibyl were faded and tattered, and over them she wore a threadbare shawl as old and gray as herself. A woman of her profession could easily amass a small fortune spinning false and flattering tales—all the more so for the curse that multiplied the coin of liars and cheats, and shrank it for honest men. Indeed, this very soothsayer could be putting on a sham, her wealth discreetly hidden beneath a facade of beggary and dearth.

But Roderick did not think so. He had carefully watched the old crone for several days, searching for any sign of deceit. Now, inside her tent, he had even more opportunity to scrutinize her. Everything he saw convinced him that she was, indeed, an honest prophetess, for only an honest one could be this poor.

“You bear little resemblance to the other young adventurers who seek the riches of Xulthar,” the old crone cackled. “Unlike those other fools who greedily seek the city, you are a man of honor in an honorless world—a soul cast adrift by the cruel winds of fate, through no failing of your own. Your father—”

“If I wanted honeyed words, I would have gone to one of the popular soothsayers with their silk tents and their gilded tongues. Do not try to butter me up, old hag—I have no appetite for obsequious lies.”

“Old hag?” the woman shrieked. “Your uncouth tongue will bring you no favors, young lord—though you did not need to seek me out to learn that. No, I perceive you have come to learn whether your efforts to restore your family’s honor will meet with success, or failure.”

“Aye,” said Roderick, inwardly pleased that the sibyl had divined the true nature of his quest. Still, he brooded impatiently as she peered into her crystal ball.

“Behold!” she began, her voice a deathly hiss that sent shivers coursing through his veins. “I see a city of unimaginable riches and treasure, guarded by an infernal force of the darkest sorcery. You will face this dark force, young Roderick of House Valtan, and uncover the truth behind your family’s demise.”

“And will I defeat it?” he asked, his blood running cold.

The old crone paused until the silence was nearly palpable. “If you do,” she answered at length, “it will not restore your house to its former glory, nor right the wrongs that you and your family have suffered.”

Her prophecy stabbed him like a dagger to the heart. Honor and duty compelled him to do all within his power to restore his family’s house, and nothing short of the riches of Xulthar would enable him to accomplish that now. To hear the sibyl prophesy that his quest would come to naught was almost enough to crush him.

“Will I fail, then?” he asked softly, refusing to give in to despair.

The sibyl clucked her tongue. “The future is not set in stone, young lord. You, not I, have the power to shape your own destiny.”

Roderick scowled. “I did not come into your tent to hear platitudes, old woman. Scry into your stone and tell me what will be if I defeat this dark sorcerer and seize the riches of Xulthar for my own.”

The crone’s eyes glinted in the dim candlelight as she stared once again into the depths of her crystal ball. “I see naught but a life of suffering and misery for you, my lord. Xulthar’s riches are cursed beyond measure. If you do not turn from this path, you will pay an immense cost for it, even if you prove victorious.”

“But if I do not take this path, then my house will never be restored and my family’s honor will be disgraced forever.”

“As you say, young lord.”

“And even if the cause of my house is truly hopeless,” he continued, hardly hearing her, “then for honor’s sake alone, I must avenge our fall.”

To that, the old crone said nothing.

“I must seek the city of Xulthar,” Roderick argued, clenching his calloused fist. “I have come too far and sacrificed too much to take the coward’s path and turn from my destiny. Tell me, woman, what must I do to prepare? What must I take with me to defeat the dark power that resides in the ruins of Xulthar?”

The sibyl consulted her stone. “You must remain true to your cause,” she counseled. “If you do not allow yourself to be swayed or tempted away, then fate will provide all that you need to defeat that dark power.”

“But even if I defeat it, the honor and wealth of my house will not be restored?”

The old crone nodded solemnly, her aged and wrinkled face softening with sympathy. “Beware, young lord! The evil that lurks within the ruins of Xulthar is so great that even I cannot foresee how your fate is intertwined with it. All I know is that defeating that great evil will not bring you the honor that you seek, nor will it restore your house to its former glory.”

Roderick grunted in grim resignation, and his eyes narrowed and hardened with resolve. “It is better to meet a star-crossed end with sword in hand than to take the coward’s path. If this is to be my destiny, I will not turn from it.”

He adjusted his scabbard and turned to leave. As soon as his back was turned, the crystal began to glow anew.

“There is something else,” the old crone prophesied, her gaze fixated on the vision within the ball. “I see a young woman, slender and fair…”

But Roderick had already stepped out of her sun-faded tent, his mind consumed with dark and brooding thoughts.

Roderick

The tavern was as dark and smokey as the hot afternoon sky was bright and clear. Roderick narrowed his eyes as he peered at the long, wooden tables, which were mostly unoccupied at this hour. A raven-haired wench was scrubbing the table nearest to him, her apron stained black with spilled food and drink. She stood as Roderick approached her.

“Milord,” she greeted him with a curtsy.

He ignored her for the moment as he scanned the hall. Three scrawny chickens were roasting on a spit over the coals in the fireplace, while behind the bar, a fat, balding barkeep mindlessly cleaned pewter mugs. A warm breeze blew through the unshuttered windows, only marginally cooling the air. Then his ears caught the sound of laughter, and in the far corner, he found the party he sought.

“My friends,” he muttered, pointing to the two men. The tavern wench nodded and smiled, and he passed her without another word.

“Rod!” said Andrej, slapping Roderick heartily on the back. “It’s good to see you, friend. Care for a drink?”

Roderick raised an eyebrow. “At this early hour?”

“Why not?” Jura said merrily from across the table. “Andrej is paying!”

“There, you are mistaken,” Andrej retorted with a mischievous smile. “Our beloved Lord Valtan is subsidizing our libations on this occasion, since it was he who called us to this council.”

Roderick suppressed a chuckle. He could always count on his old friends from the guard to lift his spirits. Andrej was tall and dashing, with long golden locks and a carefully trimmed mustache and goatee. As the youngest son of a successful yeoman, he sought his fortune by the sword, since he had no hope of an inheritance. Jura was about a head shorter than him, and more of a brawler than a swordsman, but his blue eyes shone with rare intelligence. His grin, half-hidden by his short, black beard, always made Roderick wonder if he knew more than he let on.

“Just as long as you don’t get drunk,” said Roderick. “We have important matters to discuss.”

“Ah,” said Jura with a twinkle in his eyes. “It may be too late for that, Lord.” He held out his mug, and the wench hurriedly refill it.

“‘Important matters,’ you say?” Andrej asked, leaning forward. “My dear friend, you do yourself a disservice if you think anything in this world is more important than good friends, good drink, and good women.” He smiled at the wench and held out his mug to her, and when she had finished filling it, he spanked her soundly, making her giggle.

Roderick drew a sharp breath. “Leave the girl alone.”

“Why?” Andrej laughed. “She enjoys it—don’t you, lass?”

“That depends on the size of your money pouch, milord,” she said slyly, tickling his chin.

“Ah, but which pouch?” Jura asked with a twinkle in his eye. “The one that carries his coin, or the one that carries the family jewels?”

As his friends enjoyed another merry laugh, Roderick’s hand instinctively went to the pouch of coins on his belt. He frowned—had it grown noticeably lighter since his visit with the old sibyl? He silently counted them with his fingers, and sure enough, the curse had wrought its work.

He pulled the wench aside and gave her a hard look. “My friends and I have matters to discuss,” he told her. She smiled nervously and scurried back to the bar.

“Ah, Rod,” said Jura, taking a swig of his ale. “Why are you always so somber? Can we not simply enjoy each other’s company for a while?”

Roderick scowled. “I did not call you here to drink me into the poorhouse. We are here to discuss our… pending expedition.”

“You mean our quest for the lost city of Xulthar?”

“Not so loud!” Roderick snapped, glancing anxiously around the room. But Jura and Andrej just laughed.

“Ah, Rod,” said Andrej, slapping him on the back once again. “We cannot ‘drink you into the poorhouse,’ because you are already there. Aren’t we all?”

“Indeed,” said Jura. “That is, until we find the riches of Xulthar.”

The old crone’s words came back to Roderick, about the riches of Xulthar bringing him naught but evil and sorrow. His scowl deepened, and he turned away.

“Some things are more important than riches.”

“You are correct, my lord,” Andrej said with a flourish. “But the wonderful thing about riches is that they can buy all of the truly important things. Like friends—”

“And drink,” Jura interjected.

“—and women,” Andrej finished. They laughed uproariously and saluted each other with their mugs high in the air.

“This is no laughing matter,” said Roderick, unamused. “Xulthar is a place of dark sorcery and grave danger. We must be cautious and keep our heads clear if we are to succeed.”

“Of course, of course,” Jura said dismissively. “But we have been planning this adventure for months, and all of the supplies have been procured.”

“And right now,” Andrej added, “we are enjoying our last libations before the dry and dreary desert makes teetotalers of us all!”

Andrej’s hedonistic merriment failed to warm Roderick’s heart. His apprehensions about the coming adventure and the words of the old sibyl still weighed too heavily on him. If he had no hope of success, even in victory, how could he ask his friends to join him?

“Are both of you sure you wish to accompany me?” he asked.

Andrej and Jura looked at him as if he had grown a third arm. “Of course, Rod,” said Jura. “Why would we turn around now?”

“Because of how lightly you seem to take this. Does it not disturb you that no one has returned from Xulthar alive?”

“My dear and dismal friend,” Andrej said cheerily, “why should such things bother us, when the same can be said of life itself? We all must take our dance with death, and in the end, the reaper always gets his due.”

“Aye,” said Jura, lifting his mug. “Better to face death on your feet, with a sword in your hand and friends at your side, and the prospect of boundless wealth if you survive.”

Roderick grunted in agreement, though he still couldn’t help but feel that his companions were taking things too lightly. Then again, the honor and future of their house was not at stake, as it was for him.

“That is good,” said Roderick, “but for me, it is not merely a question of treasure. It is a matter of honor.”

“Of honor?” said Andrej, raising an eyebrow. “What is ‘honor,’ if not the fleeting judgment of fools? Honor, ha! I would rather be shamed forever, and have my coffers full, than have all the honors and glory of the realm, and be penniless.”

“Aye,” Jura heartily concurred. “Honor is all well and good, but gold is all I’m after.”

“How can you say such things?” Roderick asked, suddenly animated with righteous vehemence. “Honor is not merely a title that a king or a prince bestows. It is something that burns within you—the star that guides your soul through the darkest night, the compass that directs you through the bleakest waste. I would rather lose everything else that I own, before I lose my honor!”

Andrej and Jura paused to look at each other. When they turned to Roderick again, their eyes were uncharacteristically sad.

“Rod,” said Andrej softly, “do you not remember the horror of the plague years? How many men of honor perished alongside the mean and contemptible alike?”

“Or how so many wicked men prospered at the expense of the weak and innocent?”

“I have not forgotten,” Roderick said somberly, remembering the old sibyl’s words: you are a man of honor in an honorless world—a soul cast adrift by the cruel winds of fate.

Andrej took a long drink and wiped his mouth with the back of his hand. “I mean no offense, friend. But after all that I have seen, both in the guard and out of it, I have learned through sad experience that honor counts for little in this world.”

“So it does,” said Roderick. “But that does not mean it should not count for us.”

Jura eyed him curiously. “Well, one thing I will admit is that honor is no cheaper than life in this world. Better to die for honor’s sake than to live for nothing at all.”

And what if there is no cause in this godforsaken world worth dying for? Roderick could not help but silently wonder. He scowled again as he leaned over the wooden tabletop, brooding over his troubled thoughts.

Andrej sensed his growing melancholy and slapped him on the back. “Come now! Why should we trouble ourselves with such somber speech when our mugs are full, our horses are laden, and the greatest treasure in the world awaits the conclusion of our quest?”

“Hear, hear!” Jura concurred, taking a drink of his own.

Roderick forced a smile, but did not feel it. Still, for his friends, he cast aside his darker musings and focused on matters at hand.

“Let us talk of what we will face at Xulthar,” he said, leaning in close. “The city is guarded by a dark and sorcerous power, which we must defeat if we are to win the treasure. We will face not only physical challenges, but tests of our mind and soul.”

“Yes, yes,” Andrej said dismissively. “We all know that Xulthar is the seat of some upstart sorcerer.”

“It is said that all of the city’s inhabitants were slaughtered in a single day,” Roderick continued, ignoring him. “That power must still hold sway over the treasure, and will corrupt us just as surely as the coin of Xulthar—perhaps even more so. We must be vigilant and resist its allure.”

“Rod,” said Jura, “we know what we are up against. There are no greenhorns here.”

“Aye,” said Andrej, taking another swig of his ale. “We’ve been on plenty of dangerous ventures before. We can handle ourselves just fine.”

Roderick sighed again, feeling the weight of all his apprehensions pressing upon him. The words of the sibyl troubled him as well, but he did not feel that he could share that with his friends. More likely than not, they would simply mock him.

“Very well,” he said at length, “but we must be strong of will and clear of purpose. Our primary object is to defeat the forces of evil that infest the city and curse its treasure. Only then can we claim Xulthar’s riches for our own.”

There was a moment of silence as Andrej and Jura considered his words. Andrej spoke up, his voice suddenly filled with resolve.

“I understand, Rod. And I promise, I won’t let the curse of Xulthar get to me. Right, Jura?”

“Right,” said Jura, nodding.

Andrej turned back to Roderick and smiled. “You say that this quest is a matter of honor for you? Very well, then—let it be a matter of honor for us all. To restore your family’s name, we will ride with you to the cursed city and face whatever fate awaits us there.”

“Aye,” said Jura heartily. “And become the richest men in all the land.”

Andrej grinned and lifted his mug. “To Xulthar!”

“To Xulthar,” said Jura, clinking his mug against Andrej’s.

“To Xulthar,” Roderick muttered. But though his friends seemed confident, Roderick could not shake the feeling that they were on their way off to their doom.

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The Riches of Xulthar: Prologue (AI Draft)

Long had the plague years ravaged the land, decimating every household and filling the ground with the dead. Crops rotted unharvested in the fields, entire towns were wiped clean of inhabitants, and the cities swelled with panicked migrants fleeing the spectre of death, only to spread the shadow of the reaper.

No kingdom or principality was left untouched. The mightiest empires fell as famine followed pestilence, with war harrying the heels of both. The highest priests of the old gods cursed them bitterly and died, while their acolytes despaired that the Creator had abandoned His creation to the forces of chaos. A thousand altars ran red with the blood of human sacrifice, all to no avail.

The despair deepened as the days passed, until it seemed that all of creation was in chaos. War raged across continents, as nations sought to defend their crumbling borders against invasion. Kings, once thought invincible, were humbled by their mortality and forced to admit defeat. The common people watched on helplessly as their homes were burned to the ground, their meager wealth plundered and their families broken up and scattered to the winds. Driven by desperation, many of them joined the hordes of invaders until the plague claimed them, too.

The old religions failed to offer any answers or solace, and out of desperation many turned to new gods—gods from far-off lands who promised protection from a wrathful deity. But still the plague remained, bringing death and ruin on its wake.

The rains refused to fall in their season, and once fertile fields turned to dust as the deserts reclaimed their own. Even after the plague had run its course, the wealthy and the poor continued to suffer alike. For a time, all trade ceased, as the few survivors hoarded their dwindling supplies and guarded them fiercely against any who dared approach.

But the plague years did not last forever. After the destruction had run its course, the pestilence relented, and slowly, life began to return to the land. The survivors banded together, pooling their resources and working together to rebuild what plague, and famine, and war had destroyed. Cautiously, they began to rebuild their homes and towns, reclaiming the dark corners of the world from death’s insidious grasp. New outbreaks of the plague claimed many of them, but those who survived continued the work of rebuilding.

Eventually, the need for commerce overwhelmed the fear of death. The merchants began to venture out once again, risking their lives on the dangerous roads in search of profit. Unfortunately, the plague had made coin scarce, and those who needed the trade goods the most were the ones least able to pay. Some merchants turned to barter, but this proved unwieldy and difficult, especially since the soldiers needed to guard the caravans demanded payment in gold. Those few merchants who traveled without guard quickly fell prey to the many bandits and highwaymen who now infested the land.

It was during these challenging times that the coin of Xulthar first began to circulate. Thought for centuries to have fallen into ruin, the lost city of Xulthar seemed to have risen from the ashes, its treasury filled with gold and silver. The merchants whispered rumors about the rise of a sorceror, a powerful mage who had discovered the secrets of Xulthar and had unlocked its riches. Some said he was a demon in human form, others that he was a man so wise and powerful that he could tame the very desert and make it blossom as the rose. But all agreed that the coin of Xulthar was sound.

For Xulthar had been a great and legendary city before its fall, renowned for its opulence and power. It had been a city of sorcerers and scholars, merchants and artisans, ruled by a council of wise and just elders. The city’s wealth had come not only from its trade routes, but also from its mines, which were said to hold rare gems and precious metals. With the fall of Xulthar nearly a century ago, the world had lost not only a great civilization, but also such treasures as the world had never seen.

The coin of Xulthar quickly gained acceptance among merchants and traders as standard currency. It became a symbol of stability during a time of chaos, though no one knew exactly how it had begun to circulate, and not one of those few who ventured in search of the fabled lost city ever returned. Still, the steady flow of trade brought wealth and prosperity to all who traded with Xulthar’s coin, enabling the survivors of the plague years to rebuild.

But as the coin of Xulthar spread across the land, it began to have a strange effect upon those who used it. Farmers and tradesmen who obtained the coin through honest enterprise, and who saved it against a time of need, found that their wealth diminished over time, insomuch that they could not hold onto it. Whereas greedy princes, unscrupulous merchants, and others who obtained their treasure by corruption and graft, found that their hordes grew unexpectedly, as if the sorcerous coin had multiplied.

To those who had eyes to see and ears to hear, it soon became clear that the coin of Xulthar was cursed. And yet, few there were who dared to point this out. For the need of the coin was still great, and those who profited most by the curse were chiefly the kings and princes of the people, those of power and high birth.

And so, as the plague years slowly came to a close, a much more subtle and insidious scourge spread throughout the land. For by some dark sorcery that few understood or even recognized, the cursed coin of Xulthar corrupted the souls of those who coveted it and magnified the dark desires that already existed within their hearts. It was as if the coin had a mind of its own, twisting the souls of those who used it toward madness and destruction.

The Riches of Xulthar: Prologue

Long had the plague years ravaged the land. No household was left unscathed by it, no graveyard was left unfilled. Crops rotted unharvested in the fields, while towns and villages lay devoid of inhabitants. At first, the cities swelled with migrants fleeing the specter of death, only to fall as the fleeing refugees spread the shadow of the reaper further across the land.

No kingdom escaped the devastation, and no principality emerged unspotted from the plague. The mightiest empires fell into ruin as famine followed pestilence, with the dogs of war harrying the heels of both. The high priests cursed the old gods bitterly as they died, their acolytes despairing of salvation or relief. A thousand altars ran red with rivers of blood, both of human and of animal sacrifice. But it was all to no avail.

As days turned to months and months turned to years, it seemed that all of creation had been thrown into utter chaos. War raged across entire continents as nations sought to defend their crumbling borders from the hordes of hungry invaders. Kings were humbled, emperors were brought low, and the mighty were mocked as if valor were but a bad jest. The common people watched helplessly as their homes were burned to the ground, their meager wealth plundered and their children enslaved. Driven to desperation, many of them took up arms and joined the invading hordes until scourge or sword claimed them.

The rains refused to fall in their season, and the once fertile fields that lay fallow for lack of labor now turned to dust as the deserts reclaimed their own. Lands that had been settled for longer than living memory now became as barren as the wastes. As empty towns and abandoned cities turned to crumbling ruin, the cultivated lands reverted to desolate wilderness, devoid of culture and civilization.

The old religions could not offer comfort or solace, and thus passed away with the old order. So also it was with the schools of the philosophers and the circles of the wizards and sorcerers. Even the merchants failed to ply their trade, and for a time, all commerce and intercourse ceased. The few survivors hoarded their dwindling supplies and guarded them fiercely against any who dared approach.

But the plague years did not continue forever. After the destruction and chaos had run its fated course, the pestilence finally relented, and slowly, life returned to the land. The survivors banded together, pooling their meager resources and working together to rebuild their world. Cautiously, they returned to the wreckage of their homes and villages, reclaiming the darkened ruins. New outbreaks of the plague claimed many of them, but these were mostly local, for the survivors were sufficiently hardened to dampen its spread.

As the villages were resettled and the towns were rebuilt, the demand for trade goods grew tremendously. Once again, merchants began to venture out across the shattered land, risking their lives on bandit-infested roads in search of profit. Unfortunately, the death of commerce had made coin scarce, and those who needed the trade goods the most were the ones least able to pay. Some merchants turned to barter, but this proved unwieldy since the soldiers who guarded their caravans demanded their payment in gold. Those few who foolishly traveled without guard swiftly fell prey to bandits and thieves.

It was during these challenging times that the coin of Xulthar first appeared. Centuries before, the ruined city of Xulthar had once been the center of culture for the entire civilized world. Legend held that its treasuries had overflowed with gold and silver, gems and jewels, and treasures of every kind. Before the plague years, many dismissed these stories as fanciful tales, but as the coin of Xulthar circulated freely, interest in the legendary city was renewed.

The merchants whispered of the rise of a dark and powerful sorcerer who had discovered the secrets of Xulthar and claimed its incredible treasure for his own. Some said that he was a demon in human form, while others claimed he was a man who could tame the very desert and make it blossom as the rose. For according to the legends, Xulthar had been one of the greatest cities of the world: a city of sorcerers and scholars, of merchants and artisans, of powerful princes and opulent patricians. The city’s wealth had come not only from its auspicious location amidst the most important trade routes, but also from its rich and abundant mines, full of rare gems and precious metals. But the people of Xulthar had delved too deep, or else their wizards had unlocked some great and tremendous evil, for according to the legends, the city had fallen in a single day.

In spite of these legends (or indeed, perhaps because of them), the coin of Xulthar became a symbol of stability in a time of chaos, though no one knew exactly how it had begun to circulate. Many bold adventurers set out to find the lost city, but not one of them ever returned. Still, few were willing to complain, as the steady flow of trade brought wealth and prosperity to all who accepted it. Without the coin of Xulthar, the survivors of the plague years would have found it far more difficult to rebuild.

But as the coin of Xulthar spread across the land, it began to have a strange effect upon those who held it. Farmers and tradesmen who obtained their wealth through hard work and honest enterprise found that it slowly fled them, insomuch that they could save a single coin for fear of losing it. On the other hand, greedy princes, unscrupulous merchants, and others who made their fortunes through corruption graft found that their riches grew with the counting of it, as if the sorcerous coin multiplied like rabbits within their unseen vaults.

To those who dared to see things as they really were, it soon became clear that the coin of Xulthar was cursed. And yet, few dared to point this out, for those who profited the most by the curse were chiefly those of power and high birth. The brave and honest souls who spoke out about the curse soon found themselves exiled in disgrace, their lands seized, their titles revoked, and their wealth confiscated.

And so, as the plague years came to a close, a much more subtle and insidious scourge began to spread throughout the land. For by some dark sorcery that few understand or recognized, the cursed coin of Xulthar corrupted the souls of all who sought it and magnified the dark desires that lurked within the human heart. It was as if the coin had a mind of its own, twisting the souls of those who bought and sold with it—though toward what dark and devious end, not even the wise and prudent could tell.

The Riches of Xulthar >> Chapter 1 >>

Some major news about my first AI-assisted novel

The Riches of Xulthar is now complete! I’m sending it out to my editor this afternoon, and if all goes well, it will be available in all formats by the end of September.

In the meantime, I have decided to post the entire thing chapter by chapter on my blog. I’ll be posting the final, unedited version, as well as my AI-assisted draft which I wrote/generated with Sudowrite. It was about 60/40 generated/written, so I can’t say how much of it was purely AI, but if you plug it into an AI text detector you should be able to get a pretty good idea.

My process for writing this novel was as follows:

ChatGPT: The whole thing started out by playing with ChatGPT, with the prompt “let’s write a fantasy adventure story in the style of Robert E. Howard.” I thought it would turn out to be a pretty straightforward short story, but it quickly ballooned into something else. I still kept playing with it, but mostly to get the framework of the overall story.

Outlining: Once I had a general idea for the story, I spent a couple of weeks outlining the whole thing, as if I were outlining one of my regular novels. Besides a chapter/scene map and a list of all the throughlines with their associated plot points, I also filled out character sheets for the main characters, with a little bit of help from ChatGPT.

Sudowrite: I used Sudowrite to write/generate the first draft. This was about 60/40 human written to AI generated. Basically, I would write a few hundred words, generate a few hundred words, and either keep it, tweak it, or throw it out and write something else. Rinse and repeat.

Humanizing: Once I had a decent rough draft, I passed it through the “human filter” by rewriting it into a new document, with the AI-assisted draft on my other screen. No copy-pasting, though there were sections where I basically wrote it out almost exactly how it appeared in the rough draft. However, I also made some pretty substantial changes, even expanding the rough draft into new scenes and chapters. This phase took the most work.

Revising: After the humanizing phase was done, I went through a normal revision draft, the way I do with all of my novels. I got some feedback from my writing group for the prologue and first chapter, but otherwise didn’t get any reader feedback, mainly because the process was so accelerated that I doubt anyone could have gotten it back to me in time. More on that later.

Polishing: For the final polishing draft, I went through and cut a straight 10% off of the whole novel, scene by scene. No major story changes for this phase: just sharpening up the prose and making it as clean and tight as possible.

Without using AI, it takes me anywhere from 6 to 18 months to write a novel, sometimes much more. But from start to finish, The Riches of Xulthar only took me three months—and the first of that was mostly just figuring out what to do with all of this content that I’d produced while playing around with ChatGPT. I didn’t start using Sudowrite to generate the actual first draft until the second week of May, and here we are in the second week of July, and the entire thing is finished.

I am very eager to hear what you guys think of this book, which is why I’m posting both the final unedited draft and the AI draft on my blog. I’ll be posting a new chapter every week, the final draft version on Thursday, and the AI draft version on Saturday. I hope you enjoy it!

The Sudowrite draft of The Riches of Xulthar is finished!

It only took about a month, but it would have been much faster if I’d used Story Engine. Honestly, I probably could have generated the text in a week if I’d used that tool, or perhaps even an afternoon. Instead, I outlined the project myself, wrote the first couple of paragraphs for each individual scene, and wrote / generated the rest.

Most of what I used Sudowrite for was on a sentence and paragraph level for this draft. Typically, I would write a bit, get to a point where I wasn’t sure what to write next, generate some text, and then either 1) use it as-is, 2) use it, but run it through a couple of rewrite filters first, 3) use it, but tweak it myself, or 4) throw it out entirely and keep writing. Because the AI didn’t have an outline to work with, it often took the story off in weird and non-useful directions, but there were a couple of times where it surprised me in a good way, and I decided to keep it in.

One of the things I found was that Sudowrite is terrible for magic systems, world-building, character arcs, foreshadowing, unresolved sexual tension, or anything else that happens on a macroscopic scale, especially if that story element changes over the course of the novel. For example, he AI engine wanted every scene involving both my male and female leads to culminate in the climax of their romantic subplot. Likewise, it was very difficult to get the AI to hit the right beats for their character growth; that was something where I really had to babysit it.

But for those microscopic, word / sentence / paragraph level story elements, I was pleasantly surprised with how Sudowrite performed. It felt a bit like I was riding in the front of a tandem bicycle, instead of writing alone. When I hit stretches that required a lot of uphill effort, I could rely on the AI engine to do most of the work while I steered. Of course, riding a tandem is no fun unless both people are pedaling, so I still had to do my part, but the hills and the rocky parts felt a lot easier, which was nice.

This Sudowrite draft isn’t anywhere near publishable, but that wasn’t what I was going for. Instead, the goal was to get it good enough to use as a starting point to rewrite the entire thing myself. Rough drafts are pretty hard for me, but rewriting and revising comes much easier after I have something to work with. Even if I end up throwing out every word, I expect that I can power through this “humanized” draft in a fraction of the time it would take me to write the novel from scratch. I may even finish it this week!

But perhaps the area where the Sudowrite draft did the most was with helping me to be productive even when my attention was being pulled in multiple directions by small children. A significant chunk of this book was written in the BYU Library’s family study room, with one eye on my three year-old daughter as she played with the other kids. Even after I had to step in to referee a bit, or to take her for a snack or a potty break, the AI tools enabled me to jump right back in and keep writing.

The amount of focus it takes to write with AI tools is much, much less than what it takes to write without them. At least, that has been my experience. Granted, my goal with this draft was not to make it publishable, but to make it good enough for the next phase, which is more like 95% human effort and 5% AI, as opposed to 40% human effort and 60% AI, which I used for this draft.

But I doubt there are any AI tools right now that can get a book into a published state with minimal human effort. In general, I’ve found that these AI-assisted writing tools are great for getting a book from terrible to passable, but not as useful for getting a book from passable to genuinely good—and as for getting a book from good to genuinely great, you can forget it with our current set of AI tools. Much better to rely on human efforts for that.

To use another analogy, it’s kind of like using a two stage rocket to get to orbit, where the booster rocket is the Sudowrite draft and the second stage rocket is the humanized draft. The booster won’t get you to orbit on its own, but it will get you through max Q and send you high enough that the second stage can finish the job. And since you’re going up in two stages instead of just one, it doesn’t take nearly as much fuel to get there.

Another advantage of doing it this way is that the final draft will be almost 100% human-written. There’s no copying or pasting in the humanized draft—every sentence and every word is typed out by hand, and while some of it may come verbatim from the Sudowrite draft, most of it is going to be changed in some way, sometimes quite substantially. For example, today I “humanized” a scene that was about 750 words in the Sudowrite draft, but ended up at around 1500 words.

What I’ll probably do is pick a few scenes from this novel and post the before and after, to show how substantially it’s changed. But even the Sudowrite draft isn’t totally AI generated, at least with the way I’ve been using these tools. Like I said above, it’s much closer to 60/40.

The Sudowrite draft of The Riches of Xulthar clocks in at about 33.2k words. That still falls short of the 40k word minimum threshold for a novel, but it will get longer with the next draft, and I expect it to end up somewhere between 40k and 45k words. With luck, I’ll finish the humanized draft by the end of this week, and the revisions before the end of this month.

Riches of Xulthar update

So it’s the 25th of the month, which is also the 25th day of the billing period for Sudowrite, and used up all of my AI words. The Riches of Xulthar, my first AI-assisted novel, is currently a little over 27k, which means I have 13k words to go (I’m shooting for the minimum novel word count for this project, though I’ll probably go 1-2k over).

I could buy some extra AI words to round out the month, but I’m going to just wait until the next billing period on June 1st. That means no more generative AI writing, but there’s still a lot of work to be done, not only for this project, but for all those practice short stories that I wrote with Sudowrite at the beginning of the month.

I’ve been vacillating between whether The Riches of Xulthar is any good, and whether I ought to just trunk it. Part of the problem may be that I got caught up in Laria’s story, which isn’t very typical for the sword & sorcery genre.

But more than that, the writing process has just been really choppy: it started as a short story attempt with ChatGPT, with the prompt “let’s write a fantasy adventure story in the style of Robert E. Howard.” But it quickly morphed into something much longer than a short story—and because ChatGPT has a short memory, I started running into problems because of that.

My early attempts to “humanize” it by typing out (not copy-pasting) the AI output into a separate document made it even messier, since I kept trying to feed those humanized bits back into ChatGPT. When it started to feel like I was wrestling with the AI to pull the story in the right direction, that was when I needed to try another AI writing tool.

Sudowrite has been great in some ways, and a struggle in others. Most of the struggle is to be expected, given that the program has quite a steep learning curve, but it does make me wonder if this first novel is any good. Most of the time, I feel like the best I can do is to get it about 80% there, and finish the rest of it myself.

And that may be the best I can do with these AI tools at all. Most of the time, it feels like I’m only getting it 50% or 60% finished, so getting it 80% of the way to a publishable quality book may actually be optimistic. It may turn out that AI-assisted writing is a lot like the coder meme above.

So for this next week, I’m going to set the AI writing aside and focus on the “debugging” phase, which I’m calling the “human filter.” It involves retyping the story word for word into a new document, and tweaking or revising it along the way. It will be interesting to see how that goes.

More early thoughts on AI-assisted writing

It’s become something of a cliche that true writers write because they can’t not write, but as with so many other stereotypes and cliches, there’s a kernel of truth in it. I’ve been writing on and off since the 8th grade, and even during periods of my life when I wasn’t able to focus on writing, the writing itch would still come for me, and I would have to sit down and sketch out something, even if I never did anything with it.

Over the years, I’ve gotten pretty good at telling whether I’ve done enough to satisfy that creative urge that drives me to write, and whether that urge has been left unsatisfied. Yesterday, I realized that something felt off because that creative urge had not been satisfied—which is strange, because after only two weeks of working on this AI-assisted novel project, I’m already halfway done with the first draft. Indeed, yesterday I “wrote” (if that’s the right word for it) a little over 4.5k AI-assisted words.

Now, this should go without saying, but the point of writing professionally is not how good the creative process makes you feel, but how well and how quickly you produce a quality finished product. But I do think there’s a correlation between the two: that you are more likely to create a quality finished work the better your creative process satisfies your creative urges.

In the last three months of writing with AI, I’ve had some writing days that were better than almost any I’ve had in years. I’ve also had some very meh days, which is to be expected… but what isn’t so expected is this feeling of being creatively unsatisfied, which I usually don’t feel unless it’s been two or three weeks since I’ve done any writing. Something weird is going on.

How much of this feeling of creative dissatisfaction is due to the fact that I’m outsourcing a significant portion of the creative work to an AI, and how much of it is simply to be expected from trying to master a new and unfamiliar skill, which has kept me from satisfying that urge in the same way as I have in the past? At this point, it’s difficult to say. Probably a little of both.

Having worked on this for a while now, though, I think that the writers (and other creative types) who are going to succeed the most with AI-assisted creative work are the ones who figure out how to integrate the human element of their process with the AI element of their process, such that each one complements and enhances the other. Right now, everyone’s talking about how AI will replace us, but that’s really the wrong way to think about it if you want to learn how to master these tools.

I suspect that the way to master AI-assisted writing is not to try to get the AI to “do the hard stuff,” or replace some aspect of the creative process, but to integrate it within your creative process such that it enhances and magnifies your own, very human efforts. For that reason, I’m changing the way that I count my daily words so that I no longer make a distinction between words that I “write” myself, and words that the AI “writes” or generates, because the AI can’t generate words unless I give it enough to work with. Often, that means that I write a little, then generate a little, then tweak what the AI generates and write a little more. When the process is working well, it’s very difficult to say which parts were purely AI “written,” and which parts were purely human “written.”

But it’s still going to take a while to figure out exactly how to integrate AI into my writing process. As I continue to do that, I’m going to pay close attention to how it satisfies—or fails to satisfy—my creative urge to write, not because that is the end goal, but because I suspect that if my creative urge is not being satisfied, the AI-assisted stuff that I’m producing probably isn’t very good. It may not be very good even if my creative urges are satisfied, but if something about the process is missing, then something about the final product probably is missing as well.

Anyhow, those are some more of my random thoughts as I continue to experiment with AI-assisted writing. I was hoping to finish the rough/AI draft of The Riches of Xulthar before the end of the month, but I’m almost out of AI words for this billing cycle, so I’ll probably move on to the “humanizing” phase for what I’ve already written, which is where I retype the AI-generated stuff in order to pass it through what I like to call “the human filter.” Hopefully that helps to give the story a little more of my personal voice and style, and not read like something that could have been AI generated by anyone. But I’m still working out and experimenting with that part of the process, just like all the others.

Practice Writing AI-Assisted Stories

For an elective pottery class at a large university, the instructor told his students at the beginning of the semester that they could choose to be graded on the quality of their final piece, or the quantity of pieces they produced. But they had to decide right then, in the first week of the class, and couldn’t change their decision after.

About half of the students chose to be graded on the quality of their final piece. They were confident that they could produce a high quality piece if they worked on it hard enough, and could probably save some time too. The other half chose quantity over quality: they figured that was the safest course, since even if they never learned how to excel at pottery, at least they would still get an A for putting in their hours.

Those who were graded on quality focused all of their time and energy on producing their final project. Those who were graded on quantity churned out pieces as quickly as they could, without focusing too much on any one piece.

At the end of the semester, a funny thing happened: the final projects of those students who chose quality over quantity were actually inferior to the last few pieces of the students who had chosen quantity over quality. By practicing on multiple pieces and putting in the tedious hours that the other students had hoped to avoid, they had paradoxically learned how to produce higher quality work—even though that wasn’t what they had been focused on.

I’ve been experimenting a lot with AI-assisted writing recently, mostly with ChatGPT, but I just started using Sudowrite as well. Contrary to popular belief, these are difficult tools to master, with a learning curve that starts off fairly shallow but ramps up to be dauntingly steep fairly quickly. This summer, I plan to write a novel with these tools, but because I have much to learn—and literally no one to teach me, since the technology is so new that we are all pioneers—I have decided to start with short stories instead.

My goal for this week is to produce ten AI-assisted short stories, at least up to the rough draft stage. So far, I’ve produced four, which is actually more than I expected to have at this point. Yes, they’re rough—each of them will have to pass through what I call the “human filter” before they’re ready to put out into the world: the choppier the AI version, the harder the work in the human filter stage—but they are still recognizeable as stories.

But just like the kids in the pottery class who chose quantity over quality, I’m not going to try to make any of them perfect—at least, not right now. My goal right now is just to get them done. Later, I’ll do my best to perfect them.

Along the way, I’m keeping notes on things that work and things that don’t. It’s getting to be a pretty big list, and I’m sure it will get much bigger as I go. At some point, I may share it as a blog post.

I’ll also be experimenting with different story generation methods, such as:

  • Starting with ChatGPT from scratch and moving to Sudowrite for refinement,
  • Starting from scratch with Sudowrite,
  • Starting with the Mythulu cards and using those as inspiration for AI guidance,
  • Writing a “seed” of a couple hundred words or so and seeing where the AI models take it, or
  • “Seeding” both the beginning and ending, and using the AI models to fill in the middle.

I’ll probably come up with some other combinations, but those are pretty good to start with.

When the whole thing is over, and all of these stories have been passed through the “human filter” and polished enough that I feel that they’re ready to send out into the world, I’ll probably put them all together into a short story collection and release that directly, rather than releasing them individually as short story singles. I may do that later, but with how quickly I can put out these stories (and how few of the traditional markets are willing to publish them), there’s really no reason to wait.

Anyhow, that’s my thinking at the moment. But I may be getting ahead of myself, since I’ve only written four stories so far. Ask me where things are on Saturday, after I’ve written all ten.

Where have I been?

So it’s been almost two weeks since I last posted anything, including any of the half-dozen or so short stories I’ve listened to that I feel are worth sharing. What’s going on?

We did just have a new baby less than two months ago, though that’s not been as disruptive to everything as I expected. My productivity actually went up after he was born, partially because of all the AI-assisted writing I’ve been doing, and partially because I’ve been working on the final revisions for Children of the Starry Sea, which are easier in some ways than writing the initial draft.

But I do think it’s the revisions that have thrown off my blogging, as well as the total lack of a routine. We’re gradually getting back into one, now that the new baby’s rhythms are becoming more consistent. As my current WIP project winds down—which is no small thing, since this is the longest novel I’ve written since I started publishing—I find myself in that weird between-projects state, where I don’t have any firm direction to guide my progress. Combine that with the total lack of routine that comes from having a new baby, and balls are going to get dropped.

Aside from this blog, though, I haven’t dropped too many balls. I’m still on track to write three novels this year, and should be able to pick up the next one without too much of a delay (since this is going to be an experimental AI-assisted novel, though, I may take a week or two to write a few short stories just to familiarize myself with the AI tools). And Children of the Starry Sea has actually turned out pretty well, in my (albeit limited) estimation.

So today I’m going to send this story out to my editor, moving it into the publishing queue. It’s already up for preorder on Amazon and the other sites that allow for assetless preorders. Then I’ll try to schedule a few blog posts catching up on those short stories I feel are worth recommending.

…and now the toddler just woke up, so I have to go. Another day in paradise, right?

Prepping for a new novel project

I am so far behind on so many things right now. My in-laws went to Idaho for the week, so all of the childcare has fallen on us while they’re gone, and we’ve just been swamped. I know that there are amazing parents out there who can watch five kids at a time, by themselves, without breaking a sweat, but we haven’t leveled up that far yet, and our newborn and three year-old are really kicking our butts.

It probably didn’t help that I started a new AI-assisted short story about a week ago and became really engrossed in that for a while. It all started when I prompted ChatGPT to write a story about Conan the Barbarian in the style of Robert E. Howard. Let me tell you, if you want to get ChatGPT to break its own content guidelines in a totally awesome way, that is the way to do it! It gave me this awesome fight scene, and then this part about a slave girl, and then it got super steamy… and then I decided to delete it and start over.

So I started a new chat, with the prompt “Let’s write a fantasy adventure story in the style of Robert E. Howard,” and immediately it launched into a pretty good fight scene. Here is what it gave me:

The sky was blood-red as the setting sun cast its final rays across the desolate landscape of the wasteland. The cracked earth was parched, and the air was thick with dust and despair. In the midst of this barren terrain stood a lone figure, clad in tattered armor, with a sword sheathed at his side. His name was Roderick, a seasoned warrior who had seen many battles in his days.

Roderick had been on a quest to find the lost city of Xulthar, rumored to hold unimaginable riches and ancient secrets. But the journey had been treacherous, and he had faced countless obstacles along the way. His companions had fallen one by one, leaving him to brave the dangers of the wasteland alone.

As night fell and the moon rose, Roderick sought shelter in the ruins of an ancient temple. Its crumbling walls were adorned with faded symbols of a long-forgotten civilization, and its dark interior was filled with an eerie silence. Roderick’s senses were on high alert as he made his way through the labyrinthine corridors, his sword ready in his hand.

But he was not alone.

A guttural growl echoed through the air, and Roderick whirled around to see a pair of glowing red eyes staring at him from the darkness. A monstrous creature, half-human, half-beast, lunged at him with razor-sharp claws. Roderick swung his sword with all his might, but the creature was fast and agile, evading his strikes with unnatural speed.

The battle was fierce and brutal, as Roderick clashed with the creature in a deadly dance of steel and blood. His muscles strained, and his heart pounded with adrenaline as he fought with every ounce of his skill and strength. The creature was relentless, its claws slashing through the air with deadly precision, but Roderick’s sword found its mark, slicing through flesh and bone.

Finally, with a final swing, Roderick delivered a crushing blow to the creature, sending it crashing to the ground. Its red eyes faded, and its grotesque form transformed into that of a man, clad in ragged clothes.

As Roderick caught his breath, he looked down at the fallen man, who was gasping for breath, his eyes filled with fear and confusion. Roderick recognized him as a lost traveler who had succumbed to the dark magic of the wasteland, transforming into a monster. He had seen this before, a dark sorcery that twisted the minds and bodies of those who dared to venture too far into the forbidden lands.

Roderick’s heart went out to the fallen man, and he knelt down beside him. With his last breath, the man begged for forgiveness, his human form returning briefly before he passed away. Roderick closed the man’s eyes, offering a silent prayer for his soul.

With a heavy heart, Roderick continued his journey, pushing deeper into the heart of the wasteland. He knew he was close to finding Xulthar, and he could feel the pull of its ancient power growing stronger with each step he took. But he also knew that the dangers ahead would be even greater, and he would need all his skill and courage to overcome them.

As he pressed on, Roderick encountered more of the twisted creatures that lurked in the wasteland. He battled monstrous beasts and encountered treacherous traps, but he never wavered in his determination. He was a warrior forged in the fires of battle, and he would not be deterred.

Finally, after days of relentless pursuit, Roderick stood at the entrance of a massive stone gate adorned with intricate runes. This was it, the entrance to Xulthar. He could feel

Not too bad. A little rough around the edges, much like everything ChatGPT gives you at first, but I decided to work with it. I prompted the model to give me the story all the way from start to finish, and then, instead of simply copy-pasting, I decided to manually transcribe it myself, adding and editing as I went.

One thing led to another, and pretty soon I was 4k words into a short story that was taking on a life of its own. It bore only a loose resemblance to the material ChatGPT gave me, at least in terms of overall story structure. Over the next few days, I tried forking the conversation at a few points, copying what I’d written to see what ChatGPT came up with next, but it wasn’t keeping up very well, and I found myself using less and less of what it was giving me.

At the same time, the story was quickly turning into a novelette, and from there into a novella. In fact, it was ballooning so quickly that I realized I was neglecting my novel WIP, Children of the Starry Sea. So I decided to set the story aside for a while…

…except then it occured to me that I’m going to need a new novel WIP in May, and the one I had planned (Return of the Starborn Son) isn’t really outlined yet. I’ve been trying to outline it while finishing the revisions for Children of the Starry Sea, but haven’t made much progress on it, and it’s going to be a big one—possibly longer than Children when it’s done.

So I thought to myself, why not turn this story into my next novel WIP and work on outlining that instead of Return of the Starborn Son? With post-it notes and a dry erase marker (and some help from my toddler, who decided which color post-it notes to hand to me), I put together a basic story outline, which should come out to about 40k words when it’s done. As you can see, I used the window of my home office to put it all together, which was fun. 40k words is pretty short for a novel, just barely crossing the line over what SFWA considers a novella, but for a Conan-style sword & sorcery fantasy, it should be perfect.

I’ve also decided to make this an AI-assisted novel, using ChatGPT of course but also trying out Sudowrite, which looks like a much more useful AI writing tool. Getting ChatGPT to help you write anything longer than about 4k words is like trying to write on a whiteboard with boxing gloves on your hands. It’s going to be experimental, but I think I can turn it into something publishable in the next three or four months. It should be a fascinating learning experience either way.