Trope Tuesday: Deus Ex Machina

God from the machine. Literally.

This one is by request.  A Deus Ex Machina, or “God from the Machine” ending, is basically when the author writes himself into a corner and pulls something out of his butt to resolve the story.

The term comes from ancient Greek theater, which often employed this technique–probably because the audience was known to get violent when the show didn’t end the way they wanted it to.  Basically, a crane–the “machina,” or machine–would lower an actor playing the role of one of the gods–the “deus”–who would then resolve everything and tie up all the loose ends without the heroes having to do anything.

Sound unsatisfying?  Yeah, I think so too.  That’s why it’s often used as a derogatory term, much like Mary Sue.  HOWEVER, it can be done well.  As always, your mileage may vary, but here are some examples that pull it off:

WARNING! SPOILERS!

  • Watership Down:  A girl saves Hazel from her cat.  Satisfying because it makes sense from the girl’s point of view, and humanizes the story by showing that it really does take place in our world.
  • The Hobbit:  The eagles arrive out of nowhere to turn the tide of the Battle of Five Armies just at the critical moment.  Satisfying because it’s a cavalry ending as well, though some fans don’t like it.
  • Lord of the Rings:  Again, the eagles swoop down and save the day, this time by rescuing Frodo and Sam from the fires of Mount Doom.  Satisfying because after coming this far, we really don’t want a downer ending.
  • Harry Potter and the Sorcerer’s Stone:  Harry is saved by his mother’s love.  Satisfying because of the symbolism and the power of love.
  • Lord of the Flies: Just as the boys are about to kill each other, a military ship arrives out of nowhere and rescues them.  Again, satisfying because of the symbolism, as well as the collective “what have I done” moment.
  • Schlock Mercenary:  Many, many occasions.  Satisfying because it’s brilliantly lampshaded.
  • Monty Python and the Holy Grail: “…the animator had a fatal heart attack!  The cartoon peril was no more!”
  • Raiders of the Lost Ark:  The Nazis capture Indiana Jones and get the Ark of the Covenant, but when they open it, a supernatural force kills them all.  Satisfying because it squares with Indy’s general MO and his pattern of spectacular failures.
  • The War of the Worlds:  The humans are utterly powerless to stop the aliens, but they all die off from germs.  Satisfying because of the underlying message.

Does this mean that it’s a good idea to write off any criticism that your own work suffers from a Deus Ex Machina?  Probably not.  This is one of those things that readers tend not to notice when it’s done well.  If your readers notice it, chances are that something is broken.

As you might guess, there’s a lot of gray area as to what constitutes a Deus Ex Machina, and what is actually something else.  Generally, if the ending is properly foreshadowed, either by a Chekov’s Gun or by good character development, it’s not a Deus Ex.  The foreshadowing removes the “out of nowhere” aspect that readers find so unsatisfying.

Foreshadowing is one way to fix a Deus Ex Machina.  Another way is to toss out the ending and rewrite it from scratch, starting at the point where hero starts getting sidelined.  According to Dan Wells’ seven point story structure, the hero should typically spend the first half of the story reacting to the villain, and the second half getting the villain to react to him.

There are lots of other ways to fix a Deus Ex Machina, but those are probably the biggest ones.  If you have any other suggestions, by all means, suggest away.

Final polish

I mapped out all the major assignments for my capstone class for the next month on my calendar.  Turns out I’ve got a lot more work than I thought I did.  Because of that, I decided to start work on Genesis Earth 4.0 today.

This is the final polish before World Fantasy convention.  Of all the stuff I’ve written, Genesis Earth is the only ms that I feel is ready for me to send to editors/agents.  With this draft, I hope to smooth out the writing, make the text more readable–basically, make this book really shine.  We’ll see if it succeeds.

It’s kind of nerve-wracking, in some ways, doing this final edit (inasmuch as any edit is “final”).  Previously, whenever I did a revision, I knew that I had time to come back later and fix anything that I just couldn’t get to.  Now, this is where it counts.  The writing has to be perfect.

Imagine how horrible it was to find a grammatical mistake on page one.  I’d forgotten to capitalize the first word of a sentence in the third or fourth paragraph.  Thankfully, it was the only mistake I saw on that page, but it’s enough to make me nervous about those chapters I sent out to the editors from BYU’s Writers and Illustrators for Young Readers.  I know how to write–really, I do!  Please believe me!

So today, every hour of the day was jam packed with classes, work, homework, and obligatory social activities.  I only had two hours to write, and in that time, I only wrote about 500 words for Genesis Earth (though, to be fair, I’m measuring it by comparing documents and only counting the words that changed).  Ouch.  Not sustainable, if I want to finish Genesis Earth and Bringing Stella Home (I need to change that title) before World Fantasy.  I made up for it by writing for half an hour just now in Stella, but still…

And this is where I hope I don’t mess things up.  Every time I’ve tried to juggle two projects at once, I’ve found it very hard to do so.  It’s something I’ll probably have to learn, if I want to write professionally, but it’s still very hard.  I hope my writing quality doesn’t suffer because of it.

If worst comes to worst, I’ll focus on Genesis Earth until it’s done to my satisfaction.  Shouldn’t take more than a couple of weeks,  even with school.  But I’m still keeping my goal to finish Stella before World Fantasy.

In unrelated news, in my political philosophy class today, Professor Hancock mentioned Huntington and I said, under my breath, “that guy was so full of crap.” Well, it turns out that Professor Hancock is quite the admirer of Samuel Huntington and his clash of civilizations theory.  This is going to make class…interesting, to say the least.  After studying this stuff my entire college career, I really do believe that Huntington’s theories are utterly full of crap.

Oh, and I had a great idea for a comic: Plato’s Republic, as a cartoon!  Okay, maybe I’m just a geek, but seriously, if it were done well, it could  be really, REALLY cool.  Really cool.