{"id":8719,"date":"2013-07-08T01:22:51","date_gmt":"2013-07-08T07:22:51","guid":{"rendered":"http:\/\/www.onelowerlight.com\/writing\/?p=8719"},"modified":"2013-07-08T01:22:51","modified_gmt":"2013-07-08T07:22:51","slug":"its-all-there-mostly-just-out-of-order","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/www.onelowerlight.com\/writing\/its-all-there-mostly-just-out-of-order\/","title":{"rendered":"It’s all there (mostly), just out of order"},"content":{"rendered":"

\"SW-VISo I picked up the rough draft of Star Wanderers: Benefactor (Part VI)<\/strong> this week and started making notes for the revision.\u00a0 It turns out that most of the scenes after the first chapter are jumbled and out of order.<\/p>\n

This is good, because it means that I don’t have to toss it out and write it from scratch.\u00a0 All I have to do is figure out the right order, rework the transitions, and then maybe add a couple of scenes to smooth things over.\u00a0 Not too difficult, and it should turn this story around from something’s-broken-and-I-don’t-know-what to dang-this-is-awesomesauce.<\/p>\n

It’s not so good, though, because it means I’m going to have a real struggle over the next couple of weeks to get at the core essence of this story and draw it out.\u00a0 That’s always tough, when I don’t get it on the first pass.<\/p>\n

To be honest, I’ve kind of been avoiding this story for the last couple of months.\u00a0 When I finished the rough draft and put it on the back burner, I had the sense that something was wrong, but I didn’t know what it was.\u00a0 That’s always the worst.\u00a0 Now that I know, it’s just a matter of doing the work.\u00a0 But that’s also daunting, because it’s like I’m standing at the base of a mountain looking up.\u00a0 At least the climb itself is invigorating, so once I get started, it should be pretty straightforward.<\/p>\n

Benefactor<\/strong> takes the Star Wanderers<\/strong> series in a bit of a different direction, focusing on Jakob (Mariya’s father) and his struggle to provide for his family when all he’s ever really been is a star wanderer.\u00a0 As an outworlder, he’s always had a certain amount of pride and independence, but as a starbound refugee with a family to look after, that only gets in the way.\u00a0 When he married Salome and settled down, it seemed like they had a bright future, but now he’s trapped in a life he never wanted, and the love he once shared with his wife has grown cold.<\/p>\n

Here’s an excerpt from the first chapter, which probably won’t change much in the final draft:<\/p>\n

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Jakob never felt more bone-weary than when he came off of a twelve-hour shift at the Oriana Station dockyards. His feet ached and his back groaned with pain, even in the low gravity of the tram as it raced from the hub to the rimside habs. As usually, the narrow car was crammed like a vacuum pack, every seat occupied with the hot and sweaty bodies of the other workers. He glanced out the window to catch a glimpse of the stars, but an advertisement for a synthetic protein formula filled the holographic windowpane.<\/p>\n

My life is a prison<\/em>, he thought to himself\u2014silently, as always. It\u2019s a prison of my own making, but it\u2019s a prison nonetheless.<\/em><\/p>\n

The twelve hour shifts had started only a standard week ago, but already it felt like months. A Gaian Imperial battle group had just arrived from the Coreward Stars, panicking some and causing a lot more work for others. Jakob didn\u2019t have much time to follow interstellar politics, but he knew it meant longer work shifts for the foreseeable future. Which really wasn\u2019t so bad, except that the overtime pay would barely keep the family above water, without paying off any of their debts.<\/p>\n

From the quadrant tram station, he took an elevator to the slums on the lowest level. This was always the worst part: getting used to the slightly heavier gravity, after spending so much time in null-gee at the hub. He shuffled down the rimside corridor, barely lifting his feet off the floor. The walls were drab and gray, but spotlessly clean. That was something to say about the immigrant community\u2014they might be poor, but they weren\u2019t dirty.<\/p>\n

The pungent odor of Deltan cooking spices met his nose the moment the door hissed open. That would be his mother-in-law, fixing dinner. He stepped inside and dropped his work boots on the floormat, waking his sister-in-law\u2019s baby in the living room. He cringed from the high-pitched wailing almost as much as he did from the tongue-lashing he expected to get for it. But what did it matter? Ignoring the baby\u2019s cries, he trudged off toward the bathroom for a much needed shower.<\/p>\n

\u201cOh, hi Dad!\u201d<\/p>\n

His daughter Mariya bounded down the hallway, her black hair bobbing with every step. The bright smile on her sixteen year old face cut through his dark mood, at least momentarily. She gave him a great big hug, and he returned it with a grunt.<\/p>\n

\u201cGuess what?\u201d she said, her eyes lit with excitement. \u201cI finally found someone to rent out the spare room to!\u201d<\/p>\n

Jakob raised an eyebrow. \u201cOh?\u201d<\/p>\n

\u201cYeah! A couple from Delta Oriana\u2014Megiddo Station, in fact. At least, the girl is from there. Her husband is out working on his ship\u2014he\u2019s a star wanderer, see\u2014but she\u2019s out in the living room right now, talking with Aunt Giuli. Do you want to meet her?\u201d<\/p>\n

Her words passed over him like a flurry of raw, unprocessed data. He focused on the important parts and disregarded the rest.<\/p>\n

\u201cHow long are they going to stay?\u201d<\/p>\n

\u201cOh, not long. They just need a place to stay for a couple weeks until they\u2019ve refitted their ship. Apparently, they\u2014\u201d<\/p>\n

\u201cHow much are you going to charge them?\u201d<\/p>\n<\/blockquote>\n

So yeah, it’s a new direction from the previous books, but it’s got a lot of the same characters and ties in quite well with Fidelity,<\/strong> I think.\u00a0 Also, it expands the universe and shows some other aspects of what life is like for star wanderers and outworlders in general.<\/p>\n

It’s going to be to be a lot of work making sure I get this one right, but it’s a short novella, so it shouldn’t take too long.\u00a0 Barring no unforeseen complications, I should still be able to get it out before the end of the month.\u00a0 The next two books, Reproach<\/strong> and Deliverance,<\/strong> should be ready soon after that.<\/p>\n

In the meantime, I’d better get some shuteye so I can wake up early and work full steam on this book tomorrow.\u00a0 Gnight!<\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"

So I picked up the rough draft of Star Wanderers: Benefactor (Part VI) this week and started making notes for the revision.\u00a0 It turns out that most of the scenes after the first chapter are jumbled and out of order. This is good, because it means that I don’t have to toss it out and… Continue reading It’s all there (mostly), just out of order<\/span><\/a><\/p>\n","protected":false},"author":2,"featured_media":0,"comment_status":"open","ping_status":"open","sticky":false,"template":"","format":"standard","meta":{"jetpack_post_was_ever_published":false,"_jetpack_newsletter_access":"","_jetpack_dont_email_post_to_subs":false,"_jetpack_newsletter_tier_id":0,"_jetpack_memberships_contains_paywalled_content":false,"_jetpack_memberships_contains_paid_content":false,"footnotes":"","jetpack_publicize_message":"Next project: SW-VI: BENEFACTOR. With luck, it should be out by the end of this month!","jetpack_publicize_feature_enabled":true,"jetpack_social_post_already_shared":true,"jetpack_social_options":{"image_generator_settings":{"template":"highway","default_image_id":0,"font":"","enabled":false},"version":2}},"categories":[857],"tags":[474,42,156,155],"class_list":["post-8719","post","type-post","status-publish","format-standard","hentry","category-sw","tag-excerpts","tag-frustrations","tag-revising","tag-rough-drafts","entry"],"jetpack_publicize_connections":[],"jetpack_featured_media_url":"","jetpack_shortlink":"https:\/\/wp.me\/p7iXK-2gD","jetpack_sharing_enabled":true,"jetpack_likes_enabled":true,"_links":{"self":[{"href":"https:\/\/www.onelowerlight.com\/writing\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/8719","targetHints":{"allow":["GET"]}}],"collection":[{"href":"https:\/\/www.onelowerlight.com\/writing\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts"}],"about":[{"href":"https:\/\/www.onelowerlight.com\/writing\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/types\/post"}],"author":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/www.onelowerlight.com\/writing\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/users\/2"}],"replies":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/www.onelowerlight.com\/writing\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/comments?post=8719"}],"version-history":[{"count":6,"href":"https:\/\/www.onelowerlight.com\/writing\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/8719\/revisions"}],"predecessor-version":[{"id":8725,"href":"https:\/\/www.onelowerlight.com\/writing\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/8719\/revisions\/8725"}],"wp:attachment":[{"href":"https:\/\/www.onelowerlight.com\/writing\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/media?parent=8719"}],"wp:term":[{"taxonomy":"category","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/www.onelowerlight.com\/writing\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/categories?post=8719"},{"taxonomy":"post_tag","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/www.onelowerlight.com\/writing\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/tags?post=8719"}],"curies":[{"name":"wp","href":"https:\/\/api.w.org\/{rel}","templated":true}]}}